All Comments on 'The French Exchange Ch. 02: The Pain'

I think you should look at getting a volunteer editor to help you before you submit. Some of the spelling mistakes and poor grammar are so basic that it makes you look a bit silly. You were even spelling the name of one of your characters wrong at one point. This reads like a first draft with little or no revision. That's a poor way to write. The other point is that this is a website for erotica, and frankly your story isn't erotic. Keep writing because that's the only way to improve, but don't be content with yourself as an author - always strive to improve all aspects, even the boring grammar parts.

This is my favorite series on this site, I cannot wait for more, this is absolutely incredible.