All Comments on 'The Garden Club Ch. 04'

The desire to hurt someone. Why would anyone want to and why would anyone accept being tortured? Even for a fantasy - this just doesn't make for interesting or erotic reading.

... why someone would read a story in the BDSM category and then whine about it being BDSM. It just makes you look stupid, idiot.

It has immediacy, it has precision, it has wickedly abusive detail. But all the time we're aware it's inhabited by real human beings, very credibly portrayed.

This is my first comment. I wanted to wait till I read it all. Sometimes chapter stories get weaker after a promising start. This certainly didn't.

I've given each chapter four stars. I reserve five for pretty perfect stories: I have high standards, both for myself, and for other authors. There are too many glitches; incorrect spellings, wrong word choices, for it to earn five.

But you're a potentially excellent writer if you get a capable editor to sort out the glitches for you. You can't do it yourself; nobody can, including me. And every published author.

I wish you well. Thank you for a fascinating journey into your mind, and the minds of others.

A waste of time and space.

Scotsman69 says it better than I could! This story actually has a story along with the porn. And the porn is hot! But the story has me curious. More, please.

I totally concur with Scotsman here.

While male subs are not my cup of tea, It was well written and certainly thought provoking. People have issues and to take a story and try to unravel them is brave.

The spelling and gramatical errors did detract for me too though.

Grammatical even !!

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But I note that most readers agreed with me. Starting with Chapter one of this sorry tale, fewer and fewer people "viewed" it. The last couple had no "favorites". That's what you get when you put poorly conceived stories that create nothing of interest. None of the characters are well developed and there is no reason why they are doing what they are doing. The reader feels nothing towards either character. She has no moral bearing and he's just a lump, so it's hard to be mad at her or upset for him.

Glad you stopped writing.

Zero favorites seems right. Can I vote zero?

They all choked and died when they read this garbage.

Great work! Keep it up!

Was wasting my time reading this in the first place. "1".

Another nice but unfinished story!