All Comments on 'The Good Guy Always Loses Ch. 02'

leaving no stone unturned or a way back, TK U MLJ LV NV

It's a shame these sorts of stories bring all the white knights out of the woodwork, hope you keep writing.

sick in hurting others.

Not much reaction from Jeff. He just watched, didn't stop them, didn't walk out, didn't say much. Should be titled; the guy is always a loser.

I enjoyed the dream/nightmare imagery, but Jeff's character was beyond any real or imaginary belief. All-in-all the story writing showed promise, so keep writing, but pick a stronger man to write about and met-out some retribution..

Because you make him so wimpy, spineless and weak willed that it's a joke. Sam Colt developed guns for situations like this. Use one. When you write your story and make a man or a woman SO stupid and dumb you end up with a story that's stupid and dumb. That's what this mess is. Just plain terrible, start to finish. It hurts my feelings to even give you "one star" but I will since ZERO isn't yet available.

are characters that you like or are sympathetic toward. There isn't one in this story. Every character would be better of dead. Every character is a villain except the wimp.

There is nothing redeeming about this story at all not even as a fantasy.

1* only because I can't give a 0

1* by lack of 0* He didn't need to be a superman, but just a bit more of selfrespect and a few "aides" could solve such situation rather soon. Story makes me wish to throw up.

Hey dirtydan,

I thought your story was well written and very deranged ( in a good way!) Of course, most people commenting on this story are going to hate it, but I enjoyed the dark tone to this series. I hope you plan to write more because you are a good writer and your story isn't the same stereotypical crap.

wow, fantastic, awesome, well written.

Loved the small penis humiliation part of the story. I think it was focused too much on the cuckold part, and I would have preferred Jeff getting more action and at least being able to cum. Keep up the good work and hope you write more stories about small dicks being laughed and humiliated.

Sweet-tits joined Angelface and ME (not I).

I LOVE your story it's the hottest thing I have read (srs). Please write something else this was awesome!

just amazing... im glad it didnt turn out to be another one of those stories with the boyfriend getting some action and enjoying the situation. its good that they were evil and cruel to him and he hated the entire thing. what a great mix of force cuckolding and humiliation . the sister made it all that more intense. great idea.

make more stories where the boyfriend/husband is forced into cuckold and is humiliated and hates it and cries.

What crap.

Why the hell wouldn't he call the police?

And as big a piece of shit as Todd was, I think Jenny and Stacey are even bigger pieces of shit!

When Jeff first found Jenny blowing Todd in his room, he should have stabbed Todd to death and choked Jenny with a belt until she died... called the cops and make up a story of Todd accidentally killing her and attacking him to cover it up... it would be ruled self-defense.

And as for these scumbags, why does Jenny keep going to his house to fuck? She doesn't even live there she just has an extra key. Call the fucking police, say they entered without permission, wouldn't leave, forced Jeff to stay and pushed him around... press charges and let them spend a few years in prison.

Finish college, get a job in another state and never contact his family again... maybe send a letter or call to the three while they serve time in prison to gloat... with no return address.

Stories like this piss me off!

Fuck you for writing this pile of shit you absolute cunt. Jeff needs to jump off a building now

As somebody who came to both chapters, all I can say is, y'all hype!

I can truly sway this has to be the worst story I have read on this site, first of all no one man be he either a wimp or not would never do what this asshole did. it also wasn't even half believable even for a fictional story.

I would ask that you write another, having Jeff shoot down that bastard. He needs to die, badly. And then have both his sister and his ex sold as sex slaves to the east!

Absolute tosh - the author should just shoot himself, it would be more humane than writing this rubbish.

Actually you write quite well, its just the content that is abysmal.

You really need to write another story of revenge Jeff needs to have his revenge on Jenny and his sister and kill Todd in the most horrific manner he deserves to be punished but than agian this is called the good guy always loses

Not a one of these people deserve to live. 'Little Dick' needs to get a baseball bat and crush Todd's balls and knock the shit out of his sister Stacy and his slut/whore/bitch/'girlfriend' Jenny. Then get a sharp knife and cut off Todd's dick and flush it like a turd down the toilet. Then go back and beat Todd, Stacy and Jenny to death. Then maybe I can sleep again.

How anyone can jerk off to this so-called 'erotica' in which a person's entire fucking life comes crashing down around him, I'll never know

Within the NTR genre in which it appears (the operative phrase), this is an exceptionally well-written story. The author's prose is vivid and powerful, and he relates Jeff's degradation to the reader with such force that it's no great leap, for most of us, to put ourselves in Jeff's shoes. Fear of ostracism and total exclusion is perhaps man's greatest phobia, aside from death. We are primates, after all, who aren't meant to live without nurturing people in our lives. We all have this fear, which I think is the reason for all the abusive comments by less satisfied readers. Instead of engaging in introspection, these readers are projecting their feelings of disgust and confusion onto the author. In fact, Jeff's story has some very teachable moments. His physical deficiencies aside, it was clear what egregious mistakes Jeff made with Jenny, not the least of which was being too open about his insecurities. Another very pleasant element was dirtydan's presentation of Jenny and Stacie, Jeff's sister. Despite her evil nature, I found Stacie to be incredibly sexy, though I'd never want to be involved with an emotional predator like her. I doubt that the juice would be worth the squeeze. This type of erotic fiction can be very disturbing, but it makes us feel and think on a very deep level. Who wants a predictable happily-ever-after ending all the time? That gets old after a while and adversely affects one's ability to suspend disbelief when repeatedly reading such tales.

is feared of an alpha pit bull. TK U MLJ LV NV

Ive read thousands of erotic stories of every genre and this series is top 10 for sure!!! Hope you make a come back man!

your an asshole, there are good stories that dont cross the line and then there are ppl like you who have no respect, Karma is a bitch and it will find you.. you dnt write stories that are this fucked up and not get jailed up yourself.. fyi what Todd did to make Jenny the way she is would be called rape as she was never interested in him and clearly from the bruising and disgust Jenny shows in what Todd makes her do she was not willingly coerced into having sex with him.. once raped it does go all down hill, personally I would have stood up to Todd if he was at my house doing that shit with a Magnum tucked away ready to use if he ever touched Jenny...or tresspassed for that part

I really dont know what are you thinking but I have never been so pissed off on a story until now, I am a writter too and honestly it came to me that I just take this story and remake it on my phone just so I forget this, I am sorry but you way overdid it I suggest you self control while you write this is bullshit

I get sick with these kinds of stories where a asshole Big Dick makes women slaves.

in the hopes he would get to clean them all. Lick their asses and clean is cum and even his man cock. But sob, no I cry as my stuff leaks out of my limp thing why

I was a good sissy fag and read page after page in the hopes he would get his sisters ass hole at least. Please write anoother capter centered on his eating cum and ass and cock Please

4yourpleasureiam

Yeah he walks out of the house and calls the cops how hard is that? Cops chase out intruders. Restraining order against Todd. Realize the sluts don't love him.

Game over.

Or he goes other in a 180. Sucks Todd off. Soon his ass joins his mouth as Todd's fuck property. Cut off his nuts , grow some tits and he can join the crowd. But no more whining!

I love how you betrayed the despair of the main character a perfect NTR story thank you I came so many times with this, don't let the haters get you down.

Well while the writing was great and while i understand the genre, todd needs to a die a horrible and pain full death. If that happend to me(which never would) id come home hear those noises im getting my gun or a bat and claiming i heard screams and thought my girlfriend was being attacked. Also while i understand the title is the good guy always loses, the last one should be “the good guy always loses, or does he?” And as for stacy id tell my parents what she did and have them disown her and have no communication, as for jenny im not sure what id do with her but you can figure that out. But todd def needs to dir asap

Your crap is only laughable!!! Did only read the last side and it was enough to puke!!

This guy's entire life is crashing around him. He's lost his job, his girlfriend's fucking his bully in his fucking house, he's probably going to get kicked out of college and his OWN FUCKING SISTER is culpable in helping his girlfriend cuckold him, and joining in with fucking the bully. There are only two ways that this could go - one, he kills himself, or two, he burns them all, focuses on college and gets the fuck on with his life. Jenny and Todd are speedbumps, but he'd have lost his sister in the process, too, because fuck anyone who does that to their sibling! This deserves a zero

This is definitely one of the sickest fucking stories I’ve ever read. It’s a toss-up between this and Valentine’s Interrupted. Inthat one, his sister’s boyfriend cucks him, gets his wife pregnant and then the wife fucks off on the honeymoon with the sister and her mew husband once they’re marroed...all the while the non-consenting but spineless cuck is denied sex as he watches his sister’s boyfriend-then-husband fuck his wife. On his fucking birthday. I genuinely can’t decide which is the worst read, but both authors deserve to be hit by a fucking bus...preferably at the same tine. 1* cunt

Todd slapped Jeff and he fell on the floor. A big piece of broken glass stuck in Jeff's hand. He pulled the shard out and in a slashing motion severed Todd's penis at the base. Then a vicious slash and Todd's balls were in Jeff's hands. Then Jeff dragged the two naked women through the house and shoved them out the door into the freezing cold. Then he drank a shot of whiskey while he watched the life flow out of Todd as he lay whimpering and begging for mercy from Jeff.

Continue this story but I implore you to let jeff serve the God Todd and his Angels. Let jeff lick Todd's ass hole and clean the girls Jeff deserves some satisfaction so make him pull his sissy dick as the others watch. I am jeff and love to serve.

Wouldn't even give this a Stars you mean to tell me you won't let a guy sit there while his girlfriend and sister being f***** like really

This is honestly one of the worst stories I've ever heard / read. It's really funny let several of the comments are far better stories than the actual post and it's equal. The characters are poorly written in highly stereotypical, except for the sister who is complete and utter fiction as anyone with a family member knows your sister would have actually gutted the bully and the girlfriend and left them both bleeding on the ground instead of sucking the guy's dick and looking out the other girl's asshole.

todd needs an attitude adjustment.

What is this trash?

Unlike the social degenerates that seemed to fangirl over this digital pile of excrement, I went to college. I've read books. I'll give you this, man. You have one blood soaked hell of an imagination. But, this was hardly an erotic story. What, Todd couldn't fuck his mother, aunt, cousin, etc... too? Wouldn't that have only fit more into this moronic cesspool of poorly written garbage?

Are you trying to give 50 Shades of Grey a run for its money, for poor storytelling and characters? Plus, honestly, Jeff being that big of a pussy, AND wanting to fuck his own sister, referring to her as a goddess? Dude, that's fucking sick and disgusting.

Don't quit your day-job, you wouldn't make fuck-all as a story writer, with shit this poorly conceived.

Would of killed myself if i was in his position

Needed a revenge ending! A baseball bat or a gun! Call the cops, have them arrested for trespassing. Next time, lock your darn door! How can he tolerate being anywhere near Jenny? Should have gone to Africa, there are potions that are available to enlarge a penis. Also, why didn't he ever start working out to enhance his body mass instead of being meek & mild. Personally, I couldn't have handled it, in real life! It was tough reading, since I wanted him to come out on top. I was actually excited when "loser" had his dream that he had a large cock & all the bad crap actually was a dream & he was going to get his sister & Jenny

Yeah, I have to agree with the second anonymous comment here... I wouldn't usually care, because whatever floats your boats and all, but my god, these SAME boring tropes and cookie cutter stories seem as common as dirt in the cuckold genre, and it's getting really fucking annoying and tiresome...

1) Idc what your ego says, while studies aren't that accurate atm, most of the penis studies would say 8 inch is upper average, not the norm whatsoever. People who say otherwise, are either terrible with conceptualising measurments, or take other men's boasting seriously... (I don't have penile envy, and I've seen a fair few penises, erect as well)

2) if women could be seduced, left, right, and centre, by acting like a caveman and a, and Ik an overused term these days, an actual misogynist (I'm not even feminist) then dating culture wouldn't have progressed since the paleolithic... Thank fuck, for both genders, it has by far

3) while they'd theoritically exist, stop making everyone's personalities such lame and absolutist archetypes: the jock who should essentially have multiple assault charges, the cuck who's functionally mute and physically can't say the word 'no,' the woman who's called the 'slut' who is 'hypnotized uncontrollably' by the jock. What's more, you have this odd possibly freudian slip, of some weird metatext about this guy having incest fantasies to his sister, yet his sister doesn't mind seeing her have sex with another man? What???

4) your storyline pays fof badly. All that writing in the first part, just to see her sucking him off, and then they leave??? No watching them tenderly kiss (the most heartache) or being forced to watch them have sex for awhile? What a let down...

Honestly, I hate to say this, but this overly done stereotype and reduction of men to dumb, asshole cavemen, and women to uncontrolled sluts, belongs on the board of r/incel, a MGTOW board, or the sucker's who fall and pay up the nose for Roosh V's (and other PUA's) spin doctoring.

I'd feel worse about criticising your story, but this may as well be considered plagiarism with how many times I've read this story template. You could've done a two second search on ANY other cuckold story, and done just about literally ANYTHING else away from that, and it'd automatically be a better cuck story

Brilliant! Hope you write more

He should if left him as his sissy

Even though I love when the Bull has a ffm threesome while the cuck just gets to watch. The Bull barely does something to be considered a sex god. Also, what's the deal with him calling the girls sugar-puss? Sweet tits? Puppy slut? Is he 5 because that ruines him completely. Any girl Will laugh at a guy calling them that no matter how good looking the guy is. And as others have said, way too many cleaches. There are many more ways to make the Bull dominant, have the cuckold intimidated by him and believable reasons for the girls to fall for the Bull and lose respect for the cuckold.

Humiliation is one thing , full time Humiliation is another. This poor guy got no enjoyment oit of what was done to him. This is a terrible story. A man cant help what he is born with. If a man gives true love , thats better than any size. I usually like most cuckold stories, but not cruelty.

Todd is a douche solely based on his pet names for the girls. Hardly impressive enough to be considered a sex God. Jeff is a thoughtless pussy. The women are cliché submissive, for literotica. You know the type - mindless size queens that can't think or speak for themselves and once a big cock shows up, it's like the second coming of Jesus. I get a good laugh out of their back and forth. It's so retarded it's funny. Anyway, Jeff should have called the police, had them kicked out. Changed his locks, then called mom to let them know he disowned sis and why. Then lawyer up and sue his former employer. Unfortunately, he's too big a pussy for plan a, so onto plan b. Pull out your little six shooter. Put a bullet in Todd da Stud's head. Then turn the gun on Jenny and Stacey, the betraying skanks and blow them away. Next, write a story with all the details, post it. Finally, out the gun in your mouth and blow your head off for being a stupid pussy ass cuck bitch. (I like my ending better).