by Phrenetic_Ice
I really enjoyed this, but why did you rush the ending??? There is so much more you could have said. This was lustful and tender at the same time. A first timer for her and his opportunity to be "that one"...
This story reminds me of my fantasies. I have wanted to do exactly the same thing with many of my neighbor's daughters. Please continue.
If you would have finished this story it would have been great. As is, it's a story without an ending.