All Comments on 'The Heated Storm Ch. 01'

That wasn't enough to pull me in. It was quite short. Write more so I can see if I'll like it. The premise of a wiccan and a were (?) - we don't know what the big man is yet- could be interesting. Fill it out more and give us a longer chapter. I'll read the next.

Your syntax and spelling were awful and made it very hard to read. If you intend to write more, please have someone read it before you submit it.

Needs a lot of work even before you pass it to someone to check, you should take down and try again.

I am interested to read more, though I second other comments regarding contacting an editor. Keep writing and remember that practice makes perfect!

I like the way this story is leading .

This story has a good start so far. It definitely pulled me in, and now I am very curious to see what will happen next. You do a good job with creating tension. Keep up the writing! :)

Not good...

Don’t listen too hard to the negative Nancy’s. Keep on writing.