All Comments on 'The Hostages'

I thought the story was well written and the storyline was very interesting and believable.

Well done.

Thanks for the read.

about halfway through. It isn't worth the energy of keepiong up with who is who, because you mix up the names so much.

Thanks for sharing. It could have been better (have you ever thought about getting an editor?) but it could have been much worse too.

A story about a strong woman threatens some readers. Don't let their comments throw you.

Thanks again.

DOUG out

its sad.

There are are so many mistakes I don't know where to start. It's "FARC" and not "Farc". It's Navy "SEAL" and not "Seal". It's "you're awake" not "your awake". Then there's Amy telling Ruchard that she saw "Amy" giving head. You need to find a better method of keeping your characters straight. Amy's hair color changes form brown to auburn in one paragraph.Your grammar is so atrocious it's beyond comprehension. I could go on but there are too many mistakes. Find a decent proofreader.

Lacked detail could have put more description towards the oral scenes and how mc viewed her body.

Unsatisfying ending: We get that they where rescued but that's it. Mc lost his girl while his ex(hopefully) best friend got everything he wanted in the end and some.

Like anon said why is Amy talking about Amy?????

Just like one of Shakespeare's great plays (or even more so), this little tale could even more appropriately be subtitled "Much ado about Nothing" as it was indeed, far too much, about sweet Fanny Adams, at the end of the day!

It could have been so much more, but never really `got off the ground' now did it, be honest?

A reluctant 2.5 from me, as it left ME feeling cheated, -and I wasn't even it!