All Comments on 'The Hotel'

My first story was rejected "due to long paragraphs". They were not longer than one third of these. I agree with who ever make these decisions, long paragraphs are bad for the story.

More well spaced out paragraphs would have been a much better presentation. However the story was very interesting.

I did actually experience what happened in the last part of the story with 2 very consenting guys and the memories came flooding back. So I had to read it over again and again until I was truly soaked and exhausted. Thanks for the read.

Thanks for anyone commenting (excluding the idiot I removed who just didn't like the content). These were my first two submissions and i've taken your comments on board. The two stories currently awaiting approval have far better paragraphing. Hope you enjoy