All Comments on 'The Human Condition Ch. 11'

I know this is a really old story, but I don’t understand what the hype from the previous comments are about. The first half of this story was excellent and it really reeled me in. The second half was disappointing. I think the biggest things for me were Joe leaving for so long (5 months!!!) and the threesome. When I got to the threesome chapter, I basically started losing interest. It devolved from a romance into some sort personal growth story and it made me lose massive respect for these characters. Joe leaving was understandable, him being going for so long was out of character. The final chapter left a lot to be desired too. It didn’t even seem like they fully reconciled and the final intimate scene made so many comparisons to previous exploits, that it was a turn off. I don’t even understand how people could read this multiple times.

I’v read a lot of top notch authors on this site and you are surely one of them. You are skilled at character development and know how to pull emotions out of readers. I loved the story. I must say though that Cam should not have been forgiven so easily as he could have helped with their search for Mike because he knew what Elliott was into. All in all though, well done.

I have to agree with the criticism. I just can't see Joe running away from someone who needs help and certainly not if it's Mike, no matter the circumstances. It feels like such a sudden character change. The story in general shifted into something I'm not the hugest fan of, beginning with the rape part. I don't like that at all and neither did I like Mike just forgiving Cam that easily, or the completely unnecessary three-way. It also ended kinda quick at the end there, after all that built-up it really needs an epilogue, at least.

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Still even with all that I like the story overall. the first 5 chapters were fantastic and the writing in general is really good. and it was my first story I read here.

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I know it will never happen, but if the rape was swapped with something different (I dunno, like being in a car accident in a remote place after a fight with Cam), Joe talking about his feelings after the scene in the bathroom, and not after running away into a different country for multiple months and chapters (which will remove that dumb 3-way) but in exchange adding a proper epilogue with reaction from friends and family (specifically Joe's) and their future and marriage, this could've been my favourite story.

Like Anonymous said, I really liked parts of the story but some other parts were just irreconcilable with those parts. Mike was a lovely person that was easy to empathize with, and Lucy was a sweetheart. I really loved Joe as a character before the whole graphic r**e (which I agree did not feel necessary at all), but he soured so much on me when he abandoned his friend in his time of need for that. The way their romance was building before that was very sweet and tender and kept me reading, but that part…I just couldn’t get over that.

That plus the r**e changing the whole mood of the story for the worse (when other methods could have been used for Joe’s character development), Cam turning out to be a villain himself but never really getting his punishment for that, and the “friends” threesome that also did not feel necessary, I was just left with a sense of disappointment by the end.

I found it bizarre and nice reading a story published when i was a 2-year-old kid with all the "acient " jokes and references. I love this series. The writing is bold and excellent.

Brilliant…. Just a brilliant turn of events, sadistic on that one occasion, but an excellent account & story telling routine, half hard, crying… hard again

The different tenses, so well used.

A true favourite story on here.

This was a well-written story but there are some elements and in the story as a whole that I just didn’t like at all. I don’t see the point of Mike’s graphic rape and how brutally torturous it was. If that was removed nothing would be lost, Joe could have still ran when Betsy caught them in an intimate moment (and Joe wouldn’t have seemed like such a complete asshole as he did for running out on Mike at that moment in his recovery). Mike and Cam would’ve still broken up as that was over before the night with Elliott (and Cam wouldn’t have seemed like a co-conspirator in Mike’s rape which made him unredeemable to me - and made Mike’s forgiveness of him truly unrealistic to me). And the pitiful three way moment with Kevin and Saul could have been avoided which would erase that total debacle from this story. I hated that during Mike’s first lovemaking with Joe, his thoughts were consumed with Elliot’s weight behind him and the panic it caused, with his topping of Saul and if (like Cam) Mike would always bottom for Joe, with a comparison of Joe’s and Cam’s penis sizes and how it hurt every time Cam’s huge dick entered him!! This isn’t romantic - it made the true love angle of this story backseat to all the seedier, sluttier elements of Mike’s past and really ruined the reading of their first time together. Plus the ending just stopped. Not much on actually how the couple navigated their lives, what happened next, or a real epilogue. Of course we knew they were happily together 10 years later, but never got closure on that either. Who were they meeting at the ballpark, did they marry, kids, are the people from the story still in their lives? It all just stopped and that was frustrating after so many chapters. Hoped for a better ending.

Author! Author! A beautiful, heart-warming, heart-breaking story. I know I'll come back to read this series again and again. Thank you Jayne Finn, thank you.

I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCHHHH. LOVE FROM 2021

This story made me laugh, excited, and cry like a little bitch as I read it from start to finish over about 6 hours non stop. There are positive comments from every year for the past 16 years, and now I'm adding 2020 to that. Need I say more?

how many times I've reread this story but I always come back to it. It's one of the greats and always makes me feel a little hopeful. The Human Condition is a great title for it because it's brutally honest and despite that, it still has a happy ending lol. Thanks for writing this!

This is my 4th time reading this and for me it is the best story so far. Please have someone adapt this to film.

This story always makes me cry. I'm so sad that the author has disappeared.

This has been such a great story. I almost cried so many times, and I can't believe that its over already.

This was wonderful. I really connect with the characters. Thank you for sharing.

This was just a great, great story. Everything about it. There were times when I teared up at the emotion and times when I got very hard at the hot sex (not so easy at my age: mid-70's). The evil Elliott got his due and love won out with Mike & Joe. You have done a fabulous job and my only regret is that you aren't posting anymore.

I really enjoyed that this story is written as a flashback, and knowing they will be together in the end. I just wish I knew who was coming over to meet them, but I'm going to assume you left that for me and my imagination to decide who I wanted it to be.

So I'm choosing to believe that it's a very happily married, and beautifully pregnant Betsy and her husband coming to enjoy a day at Wriggly. It's all planned out in my head how it will go, but I am no writer and have a hard time translating my thoughts into words, so I'll leave it at that.

It was a lovely story and I enjoyed it very much.

Thank you for you time & talent!

Such a beautiful story I had a few sniffles but I loved it

I love your writing!

One of the best love stories I have ever read. Although, I seriously wished we could have seen the reaction of the friends at the end.

By far my favourite story on here. I loved the little glimpse of life 10 years on at the start of each chapter and that there was an actuall story to tell, with characters that you could love and hate. Would you please come back and write some more, did Joe and Mike get married?? Did Joe have the children he wanted?? What was the response from family and friends??

So wonderful! It CAN't be finished! I want MORE! MUCH MORE! Please?

How is it I have not read this story before? I have been a fan of the M/M story for awhile now, and have read all the good ones, so I thought, until I stumbled across this one last night. 7 hours of reading later, I collapsed in sleep at 5:30am, only to wake up, and ditch church, of all places(!), to finish. And just, wow. I am speechless. This story series made me cry so hard (in both sad and happy ways) I don't think my eyes will look normal even a week from now. Loved how each new chapter started with present day, and we got to see Mike and Joe today, and how everything has worked out, but damn, the 10 chapter emotional ride to get us there was just something else. I don't think I've ever been so happy that 2 characters ended up together, but yet so sad that I won't be spending more time with them. Thank you so much for a fantastic read. Cannot express how much this story moved me!!! --pentopaper (just not logged in :)

What a bittersweet feeling. Finally being able to see how they resolve their issues with a happy ending, but that fact that this ended is upsetting. This was one of the best stories I've ever read, and I can't imagine why it's not up in the top alongside other gay stories. This deserves to be in the top of the hall of fame. It's filled with an amazing plot, love, and of corse sex. I love how this doesn't even contain a huge amount of sex described, it has the perfect amount. I loved this story, thank you. Even though it's been over a decade, I hope that one day you change your mind and continue to write for this story. But anyways, thank you for this amazing story.

I can not add to anything more than what others have already stated. So amazing. I would have liked to have finished up with what was happening in real time. Maybe for another story? Also would have like some sort of closure with Andy (his brother right?) and the whole homophob issues.

Again...wow!

TM

Great story. I enjoyed every chapter. Thank you!!!!

I have read this so many times and I agree the way you leave it without re-capturing the beginning begs the question When is the part 2 coming???

The story is so beautiful, i cried. I hope we'll be getting a new volume though :'( :))) so happy I was able to read this <3 love you jfinn :*

Jayne,

Thank you for allowing us into your amazing creative writing world. Your story was great! The past and present aspect was a wonderful touch. We as the readers KNOW they will be together and how epic their relationship will be. The past journey they experience was brilliant, tragic, and exciting. Thank you for your story. I can not wait to read more of your other stories but I put my life on hold these past few day. Every time I put my tablet down, to get some work done, I would think about Mike and Joe and be right back on the couch reading. When a story consumes my whole world, I absolutely know its a great story and written by a great writer. Thank you and your friends who helped, keep them coming.

Your new fan, Lee

Thanks! This was a pleasure to read :)

That was amazing!! I mean the characters are so real, flawed and all. they made mistakes, they learned. I think it was a beautiful story.

The best series here..

and I've read quite a lot to know so...

Read It Three times over and I still can't get enough... Thank You jfinn (^.^)

Don't stop writing .. . .

I really didn't want the story to end. It was well written, and addicting. Your characters were very developed and the plot was awesome. It's something that I know I come back to read again.

This story's so beautiful... It breaks my heart to see it end...

"It felt like the rest of my life"

*sigh*

Beautiful story.

wish there was more

I love this story, but I never do see a place where we find out if Joe's father gets to be a grandfather.

I have read this story so many times over the years. It's so beautifully written. It is truly one of those stories that becomes a friend. You don't want it to end.

It is the mark of a great writer that these characters speak so genuinely to so many. And that so many return.

FABULOUS!

I've read this story a couple times now and never commented and for that im sorry. I absolutely love this story I hope one day we get to see more stories

My second time too and I loved it even more. They are so cute together and got to love happy endings

Just read this for the 2'nd time and you still manage to surprise me with your words. Thank you for sharing your talent with us, hopefully you will give us more in the future.

im in love with mike and joe!!!! best series ive ever read!!!!

This story series is by far the best I have read. Not just on this site, but in general. I hope you are persuing a career in writing, as you have a talent. Just wonderful.

I never knew it would be this good."

I smiled. "What? Gay sex?"

Joe shook his head slowly. "No. Sex with the person you truly love."

"It felt like the rest of my life."

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good stuff- though i thought the sex was a bit too soon- and mike was too much of a horn dog_ he shoulda been more concerned about scaring joe off by having sex with him- they should have talked a lot more b4 sex- and when joe first came back and they were still on the couch crying/hugging- mike didn't need to have an erection then- it really cheapened the importance of the reunion_ oh well= it was still a fascinating story

...good! Has to be, since I rarely get these withdrawal symptoms when there are no more pages left to read in a story - except when the story is really good. Want more!

Faaaaantastic!!

I truly waS drawn into the story and lost sleeping forging ahead to get through just another chapter. Loved it. Could easily have enjoyed more that brought us on them getting through life in grad school as a dr and lawyer. Definitely many more chapters you could add. Including them moving into family mode.

This story is wonderful, just when you are reading every chapter you are already thinking of yhe next. Im so happy that id have found this story! So Very well written! Kudos to you! I enjoyed it i coed over it, i will treasure this story! Write more please! U are marvelous!

There are probably 7-8 stories on this site that are so good they are beyond the normal accolades for anything else written. Excellent, wonderful, perfect- doesn't even do them justice. This story includes every human emotion in the most realistic sense, and the slow but sure footsteps of Mike and Joe's paths to finding each other can't even be described. This is a story I could read over and over without getting bored. Thank you, jfinn.

wonderful.....i cryed laughed and loved all the way through.. this is the number ONE story on this site...WELL DONE this could be a film. xxxxxxxx keep up the writing .. however i doubt even you could better this story......

From another reader who began chapter 1 and couldn't stop until the story was over, this was one of the best I've ever seen. You are sorely missed here at Literotica, but if you had to write one truly great story at this site [and not saying your others aren't as good], you couldn't have done better than this. Four years of longing by Mike and confusion for Joe transported by fate into a H.E.A. life 13 years later to show us they're still together, in love and thriving. Kudos for this amazing tale.

Typo in the last line. How does that even happen.

"It felt like the rest of my life." I love that. Such a good story.

Loved it !!! Just wish there was a proposal and a wedding but I guess in that time it was unheard of ......:( and did you know that your stories among all the published ones on the Internet with the name human condition is the 5th webpage listing from other blogs !!! That just explains everything. .........:):):).

This story was sooo amazing, all I can say is WOW,simply WOW!!

One of the best stories I've every read!!!

I loved the entire thing, spent most of my day reading and well into the night until after 4am finishing it. I liked the style you used. We knew that everything turned out fine by giving us a glimpse of the future but at the same time, the journey was suspenseful and heart-breaking at times.

I saw some comments saying that the last chapter was a cliffhanger and I can see how that view can be interpreted but I also see chapter 11 as the end the way it was written. If you write another chapter that would be great and maybe help to bring some closure but I can also consider this the end and be happy.

I see you haven't written in a long time I hope everything is alright and that you will post again in the future.

Thanks again for an incredible story. I can see myself reading this over and over in the future.

I'm serious. I have nothing to say because its all been said. This is not a porno, its a romance, and one of rhe best I have ever read. Any praise other than that will demean it. Hats off to you.

I love this story. So I'm gonna read it again. BTW....why can it stay in the top spot in the HOF?

I spent the entire day reading, finishing this story. The only time I broke away was for toilet break or some food.

At first I chose this story for good old fashion fun but found so much more. Such a beautiful story that melted my heart and truly moved me. At moments I had tears in my eyes and other moments I was bursting out loud with laughter.

I even found myself talking to my friends about the story as if Joe & Mike were real people!

This is my first comment on this website but just had to express my thoughts. Truely a wonderful read! Thank you x

Last night, or should I say this morning, I had to stay up till 6am to finish chapter 10, and I was too exhausted to keep reading chapter 11, but I knew it'll turn out to be a great ending and well, a great ending deserves to be read when in full consciousness... Anyway, best story, so real, so good and should be remembered.

so here I am, another one stayed reading this up unti 5.30 AM. I should have done -- things; my life had been somewhat blank today.

And what else to say; kudos, sir, for making a story good enough to-- distract me. (OKAY not that hard ooh what is that two guys fucking ooh).

No; 'enough' wasn't enough. It's.... very awesome.

I like a lot of things;

How you give a soft poke on most porn stories, for instance.

How you avoided most tropes in gay porn stories -- while diving HARD onto the other -- in the best way possible.

How Cam wasn't being depicted as either the jerkass boyfriend or the twotiming one -- just another human being trying -- and failing -- to be happy.

How it does not feel too-- choking; too torturing for continuation (after all we did know what happened from the beginning. No?). Yet...

How it's still very compelling; to know what happened. And we do get to see the buildup. We get -- to see how it all happened. And the payback was all very satisfying.

I honestly almost passed over the smut parts; except the last one. I get the gist with Cam and Saul and Kevin (theirs are probably one of the most 'new' part I'd ever read, and there are a lot of porn stories. That being said; personally it's still one of the weakest parts; the feeling that it's out of the blue is-- there.), but the last one was.... yummy yums.

I personally want to read more of their post-love confession life; what had happened AT LEAST after that, but I know that's pretty much a narrative factor.

I know this is long; but for a romance work, this is..simply awesome. One of the best I'd read, definitely.

I've read this story 3 times...so far. Yeah I plan on reading it again and again. Too bad I can only give it five stars at a time.

Oh where oh where have you gone???

Wow, I don't think there are words to describe how exciting this story is. It's 5 a.m. and I stayed up all night to read it because I just couldn't stop. Bravo!

Seriously, I know lots of people, including myself, who would pay good money to read a love story like this. It was so amazing! You should seriously consider getting it published!

I really, really enjoyed this story. The time jumps, the storyline, the pacing, the character development. This was amazing!

I'm not sure you even read old reviews, but if you do, thanks for posting.

It was the best story I have read. I kept reading each chapter until my eyes were bleary. I couldn't stop because the story was so good. Joe and Mike are a perfect couple. This is true love. Like another person said, it would be good to read more about these two. I hope you do decide to write more chapters of this story.

Write a continued saga or something about these 2

i wanna read more

3 times i read this and every single time i cried it was a very well written and touching story.....you really defined the characters' emotions and thoughts to a t as if this whole story was your own life and with that i give you a five star review JFinn

Wow! Absolutely amazing. A very very great story. I couldn't stop reading until the end :-)

SOOOOOOOO good!! I wish that there was more to read. You are seriously one of the best writers on here and i wish that you would continue on. i know im not the only one who thinks this so i do hope u read all of these comments.

One of the best stories i've read on here! Thank you so much for writing it! (:

Can I give it 6 stars! I've lost more hours of sleep this week because I couldn't stop reading!

Getting to the end of it, I probably have to say I loved this all the more not only because it was written really, really well, and the character progression was so true, but, in addition, I probably loved it just a little more than I thought I would because I live in that area of Michigan, and it's just like being able to look out the window and see everything so easily! Great writing, excellent story, awesome location.

i'm not sure what else i could add. i really enjoyed this story. beautifully written, with wonderful characters and a good story development. aside from your writing skills and the general awesomeness of this tale, an added bonus is that i can relate to it. i was in love with my best friend for years. finally we tried to give it a go - it didn't. but this story, despite being fiction, has managed to restore my hope in love a bit. thank you for that!

I am compelled to tell you that this is the best erotic short story I have ever read. Really extraordinary - reading this was a lovely gift and I thank you for it.

Gosh.

I could cry..

This was so fucking amazing.

Loved the story, characters and well, just about everything! Thank you!

Seriously, that was brilliant. It could actually be a book or a film or something it was that good! These gay love stories are the best, the ones where it's not all about the sex, and this is the best of the best. I mean it babs, you've got talent.

Keep it up!

Loved it. Such adorable characters. A well balanced story with no boring bits. Can't wait to see what else you put together.

Okay so I've read so many of these multi-chaptered stories (and stand alones) and this is by far the best! Not only HOT, but actually good to read! Bravo!

It really is ove rppl.. and its the best story ive evr read.

Is it just me, or is the beginning of every chapter a piece of a very long epilogue to this great story? We find out the boys end up together, know they're happy, and we even get a great big slice of a day in their future. Feels finished to me, people.

To the author: I loved this story, the characters are wonderful! I'm sad to see you haven't posted anything new in a long time, I think you're very talented.

Oh my gosh I just loveeeeee it very well written I may add but pls you really need to finish the story the cliffhanger is a killer sniff :'(

really enjoyed this story. I really hope that there's more to come!

Okay, I can tell by the way things ended in this chapter, that this isn't the end of the story, and that you just left it unfinished at a cliffhanger. It's been almost a decade since you posted this chapter, and I was curious as to whether or not you'll finally finish this (as well as Amy's Smile), y'know, before the Mayans say that the world is gonna implode?

I'd really like to read the rest of the story, provided you decide to actually finish it. You're one of the best writers on this website, but this seems to be a pattern with your stories. It would be a pretty HUGE waste if you decided to just forsake completing these two stories.

Your fans want an ending, pretty please! :(

the best story ever, I really love this, I can't get enough of it ^^

This story was amazing. I've read lots of romantic stories on the website but this was by far the best. I love it you're and amazing writer. You should probably get a new editor though. Please write something new soon.

This was the best story I've ever read on literotica. I fell in love with the characters and your writing. Not even going to lie, the end had me crying with joy and my heart was pounding. Definitely keep writing.

I loved this story so much I read it through twice in a row. (Also, somehow I skipped the chapter about Mike moving into his flat and all the male bonding and it made the whole story confusing). I really enjoyed the character development and the style you chose to tell the story. I will say that the ending seemed unfinished but I forgive you because the rest was so great. I do hope you are still writing and being creative!

Gosh, that was the longest 4 nights I've ever spent reading on lit. I felt oh so connected to them especially since they were in Michigan, my home state. :) There were quite a few more grammar errors in this chapter, but I still understood it. Wish there was more though. ^_^

I really enjoy your work!!! Good job!!!

One of the best i ever read.... i't toock me in a rollacoster of emotions, keep the great job... and if you tell me how every one took the news ;D...

I stayed up a whole night reading this and it was worth every second. Your writing is briliant, always interesting; properly constructed; it was easy to relate to the chracters then eventually fall in love with them... it was beautiful.

Dont stop writing.

This just makes me regret I didn't have a cock.

Every few months this story calls out to me and I read it again. I've probably already said it here but this is truly a spectacular story about friendship and love and the journey it makes. Gifted writer, beautiful story!

I read this straight through from 10 at night to 3:30 in the morning. I'll be exhausted at work, but it was SO worth it. I'll be reading your other work. Thank you for this beautiful thing.

The story was amazing. I could go on and on about how great it is.

But I saw that this is only Book 1!

I really really wish that you write Book 2 at one point. It would be a shame not to finish this amazing story (AND Amy's Smile!).

Fantastic work!

great story, it made me horny, made me laugh and made me cry! Being a straight female, I thought I was somewhat an enigma liking gay male submissions. By the previous comments though, obviously not. Again, congrats. I hope you consider professional writing.

Wow... I'm so incredibly happy I found this story. It was absolutely amazing; the development of story line and character were so moving! I hope you are doing well in life where ever you've chosen to go! I'd love to know if there's a place to find more of your writing...

Pretty damn spectacular story, written carefully and with so much thought.