All Comments on 'The Hunch'

I mean I read it a couple times to make sure, but yep I really liked it.

Nice going >=)

Excellent writing, very easy to read.

I can't think of any way it could have been done better!

Good effort, DJ

Great story until you get to the last paragraph.

I know that from experience, that his last hunch just ain’t gonna pay off.

Kids you shower years of time and love on them that should really be spent on your spouse. You have years of “Oh, be quiet the children will wake up!” and “We can’t do that here, what if one of the children wakes up!”

Then the little buggers finally go off to University and you and your loving spouse just about get back to where you were before they were born. Mind you a lot of waters gone under the bridge by then and the old stamina has fallen off a bit. Then bugger it, if the little sods don’t finish they’re degrees and move back home again. And it’s back to “We can’t make to much noise the children will hear us!”

Why aren’t the little sods out having they’re own fun, instead of messing up mine? Christ I’ve only go a few years left.

Nice story my friend!

DC

good common sense writing and the plot was right on.give us more of your writings.thanks

thank you for a great story

I am glad that Kenny confessed and cleared the air with Em. He could have clearly continued lying since he had gotten away with it but there would have also been the potential for exposure (Em meet one of the women from that night, medical testing became known to Em or Sammy send more proof about that night).

Truly a loving wife and husband story! Thanks!

SleeplessinMD

They both admited what happened in the end and it made them stronger. Keep it up.

Bob

Sorry to be in a minority here, but for for an author who wrote some great stories, this was a bit of a let down for me. After the dust of misunderstandings settled, the story still did not make much sense to me.

What in the background of this couple prepares us for the wife to NOT trust her husband to begin with? (BTW, is that the default assumption to all “Loving Wives” stories?). Why couldn’t the husband keep a safe distance from someone he suspected to be scheming against him? And since when you suddenly become SO drugged in the middle of a work assignment that you start doing things that risk your whole life? And why could not the husband just go ahead and tell his wife that he had been drugged or even just got too drunk?

Not only is the reasoning of the plot shaky, but I could not really care too much for the characters of both spouses, who have the attitude of ‘trust, but first don’t trust and then check three times’.

The theme of you story actually has quite a basis in fact.

I enjoyed the story and all of the little twist and turns. You did a good job of bringing out the hidden details at just the right moment.

Thanks

I don't understand how I missed this. I always look forward to a story by Cageytee. Nicely done, thanks for a good read.

I liked this tale! However, both Kenny and Em were playing a dangerous game and risking their marriage. What seems like a good idea can often blow up in your face - a couple of red lights on his way home and Kenny could well have walked in on Sammy forcing his cock into one of Em’s holes! Cageytee, I liked this one very much.

a new low in stupid... almost as bad a JUNE GET EVEN OPPPS!

This story is 100% bullshit BECUASE the author never explains WHY the hell would A wife BELIEVE what some guy might say about her hsuband without proof? or confronting hubby?

did hubby have an affair once before? well if .. well then THAT... could be a motivation

did hubby spend too much time looking at cheating wife pron sites? well ok then ...

but in this story there is NO motivation at all... NONE

The FACT is she DID fuck sammy OR at the very least WANTED to....

this marriage is soooooooooooooooooooooo OVER....

Bad writing, bad characterization, bad plot, bad ending.

The husband is a liar who cheats on his wife. He's dumb as a post because he ignores what his "hunch" tells him, gets drunk (that's always a good idea), and screws some hooker. He claims not to remember but that's horse manure.

The wife is an airhead who trusts the word of a complete stranger. She cheats on her husband then lies about it. Is there anything worthwhile to either of these characters? I find them both to be too stupid for words.

The plot is a cliched romp through loosely connected scenes that don't seem to mesh well. The characters act bizarrely and the author's presentation of them is not credible. The "all's well that ends well" ending is banal and trite as the author busts a gut trying to make their reconcilation credible. The attempt fails and leaves you feeling dissatisfied.

I save the double goose egg for stories that are extremely poor. This story deserves it. Excellent fiction this is not.

well written story, ignore the idiots only here looking to get their jollies off. all that lacks is greater detail, for the plot was excellent and the story evolved well.

One does not go out and drink with a such an asshole. And you never let your drink out of your hand. The wife was willing to believe what she was told about her husband and willingly led a man on. That doesnt speak of respect, love, or commitment to a marriage. It does speak of betrayal, disrespect, and infidelity leading to adultry. After it was over would have kissed her on the cheek and said sorry but I cant live with a woman who has no respect, trust, or love for her husband. She was planning the adventure and refusing her husband sex, while having secret conversations of an intimate nature with another man. Nope she is an exwife.

Nice Story.

I really enjoyed your story. It's nice to be able to read a story with an upbeat plot and a positive ending. However, after reading a lot of the comments it saddens me to see so much negative criticism. Corrective feedback is one thing. At least that is constructive by helping the author improve their writing skills but maliciously criticising fictional plots and characters makes me wonder if the whole world just likes to bitch or just the people that visit this site. I realize it is so much easier to find fault with something than to look for the good in things. Maybe, that's the problem. People are just getting lazy and negative. Actually sounds like depression to me. Thank you for a well written and very enjoyable story AND LIGHTEN UP PEOPLE

I enjoyed it immensely, I really do like your style.Thank you for taking the time and making the effort to write.

At times the protagonist does appear overly arrogant but in general he got the job done, though I wonder what he would have done if he had to face a come-filled pussy?

Nice balance between two or three trapeze artists..

First there is all this talk about him not trusting the weasel then you have him go to a shady restaurant with him and he drinks. A lot of stories havew drink in them when are you dumb ass people going to get the message about drink...Oh come onm have another drink. If someone ever asked me that question I would stomp his rotten ass. An addict trying to get more like him

This so-called high power business guy, ex tough soldier, is so stupid that the reader can only scream at the monitor at such a poor story.

Yes it is sad that there are so many guys and gals out there to ruin a marriage. Iknow for a fact that they exist. My mariage was ruined by just the sort of sammy as you wrote about . But being aware of what was going on I was sloiw and steady in gathering the facts and the proof to retaliate against my whoring wife and her lovers.

Ibn my state it is allowed tio sue more than one for alienation of affection and niot knowing that the wife was lying was not an issue or excuse. 13 men got to pay me mny many dollars for thier exploits and my wife lost all the asets of the marriage .

On second reading I was as frustrated as I was originally with the deliberate avoidance of communication with all participants in the conflicts events.

At second thought, after the outing of Sammy I finally began to appreciate the story. So, first half equals nada; second half was a great read on actions between the spouses.

bet a bunch and shoot the moon, TK U MLJ LV NV

Great tale. So many tales I've read about a wife not giving her all sexually because she didn't want the husband to think she was slutty but then cheat and give it to a stranger. That goes both ways as some men don't look to their wives for kinky sex because they think they would lose respect for them so they seek to satisfy their kinks with other women. If people would just be honest there would be more love and less divorce. Have fun and stay married.

I'll shut up now.

You seem to write a lot of mistaken "revenge" stories where the husband for no apparent reason forgives the spouse for her tremendously hateful behavior. Your writing and understanding of human pain is so off that is with great relief I see you have stopped writing.

A fun read. Take it for what it is worth. Five stars.

He was tough and smart and loved his wife.

She also loved him.

a sweetheart story about two sweethearts.

where i thought you were not.

An amusing and enjoyable read

Yes, he lied a bit, but he did what he thought he had to to save his marriage and family and to expose the fuckwad sammy for what he was.

But, she also acted stupidly without trusting her husband enough to just confront him.

What if he got into an accident getting home. She could have been raped.

So a little bit of a lie to get her to see how stupid she was, was not too bad.

And, she had the sense to use it to actually help them, and the way the author wrote her, she will not fuck up again.

So, well done Cagey. A truly loving wife, a dedicated husband, a very sexy week, and an easy flowing read.

Yep! It's what I would of done.

more cuck shit.

What an idiot! He should of just left her, quit his job, and left for parts unknown.

I thought it was well written. I enjoyed the story. Keep writing.

She is too weak to be a good wife. When times are bad she will jump ship like she just did.

She's lying. He's an idiot to believe her or Uncle. Can't believe he fell for their lies and or that some sex makes him forgive her. Dumb beyond belief.

Your characters were totally believable as were all the circumstances. Pay no attention to the misogenist anonymous types.

I like Cagey's stories, but I also notice that the male protagonists do stupid shit things like tell their now-wives that they fucked a prostitute back on that tour of duty just before we got married. W.T.F. That is retard level limp dick stuff. Again: W.T.F.F. Why fuck up your woman's head like that. Just plain stoopid.

And this setup-meme where the wife somehow has a reason to be in a compromising position with that one arshole nemesis in the story...it's gotten old and slapsticky.

Nonetheless, ol' Cagey, I appreciate your efforts.

He should have relieved Jr. of about half of his teeth. Starting with a fist then switching to a shoe. Could have been the best lesson Jr. ever learned.

Manipulative bitch, sanctimonious prick. Oh, and asshole Anon...what the fuck is 'misogenist', you uneducated gimp?

I liked the story, not sure why Mauser45 has a telephone pole up his ass.

I liked this.one. Enough trickery and lying going on for two stories.

Maybe his boyfriend was on the rag. All that over a typo! Wow, bud, you need serious help.

Cute short story. Old Sammy needed a boot up the backside! How do these slime balls get around decent women?! 5*s.

Still waiting for Mauser45 to contribute anything worthwhile to this site.....ZZZzzzzzzzzzzz

This is a really great story that I had forgotten about completely.

I think the cowardly way Sammy ran out of the house speaks volumes. Not a good move on her part, but she did show more maturity toward the end. Good job!

Sammy the weasel should die!!!

A story with twists and turns but it failed for me for the simple reason that when he woke up he didn't go straight to the hospital and get a drugs test and that he didn't report Sammy for drugging him. It was the only way he could have protected himself form anything that Sammy had in mind whether blackmail or anything else. He also needed to get tested for STD's. Story failed on these points for me because they are the obvious things that any sane person would do.

I think his hunches are heartburn.

This is a good one. It works on all levels.

This was a wonderful story and i gave it 5 stars. i loved how Em agreed to be Ken's slave for a week. They really started communicating with each other again. Ken finally told her the truth about the woman or women that Sammy had set him up with and how he was drugged. Sammy was shipped off to never bother them again. Ken and Em were very happy and over time, had a couple of kids, and their relationship flourished. great story!!!

Another one star story from the author.

Husband is a sorry asshole. His holier-than-you attitude proves it. She should leave him and let him suffer the humiliation rather than take it herself.

Good stuff, well done. Thank you.

LWlurker

This is a well-told and well-written story, but it includes a bit too much "deceit" being practiced by both spouses for it to earn anything more than an average rating from me.

I rate stories according to the "enjoyment" reading them gives me, so that's the best I can do. Sorry.

Ernesto Freakin' Hemingway could post stories on this site, and the one-cell-brained people who peruse (they can't be reading for enjoyment) these stories looking for anything that's even 500-degrees removed from "cuuuuck sh*t", would hate it. It doesn't matter than none of them ever wrote anything more difficult or challenging than their name. Instead, they demand that every writer post stories which cater to their decrepit, angry and twisted psychoses. Anything else is one-voted and the writer excoriated.

It's called communication. I can't stand stories like this.

@AngelRider: you have so few positive comments. What percentage of LW stories do you find to be worthwhile?

3 stars and just barely.

It wa a good till the last part! Then it went ape shit!

Decent read. Lot of deceit and gullibility. But was this story set before the 1960's. Unless he was given some weird designed drug, virtually all date rape or similar drugs are detectable in a victim for at least 4 to 5 days (e.g. X) or longer (e.g. Rohpynhol). Half lives are shorter but still detectable. Now proving Sammy had it administered it to him is harder to prove. But test results woukd have been enough to shut down the wife's concerns. Creative but implausible. Just roll into a police station and say you have been sexually assaulted and drugged. They will dig it out. Crime labs are much more sophisticated than they used to be. But suppose that then it would have invalidated the author's plot.

very bare bones

Got crazy near the end. No thought to test for being drugged? MC is an imbecile.