by sexyentertainer
this was good. I wanted more sex. The pacing felt wrong because the beginning was all action (Awesome), and the end was plot. I like the plot, but i think you should end with action.
Also I love the tension between the women. Other commenter said that the revenge angle was unnecessary. girls dominating each other sexually is a particular fetish of mine, and in my opinion couture(another author on this site) does it best.
Please consider ending with abi losing and being humilited by Laura. That would be the hottest in my opinion, but you're the writer here!
Corporate intrigue, whoring for promotions, back-stabbing extortion. LOVE IT!