All Comments on 'The Intruder'

If this is your first story, do you hear the clapping ???

Thanks Don

Great short story, really intense. Thanks.

but seems too cliche.

Though the story line is not entirely new, the descriptions are way too good!! A 5 Star for sure!!!

ugh! if you are going to write a nonconsent story, do it! if you are going to make us ashamed with reading fiction that in real life would be scary, do it! don't tie it all up in the end with a wizard of oz "it was all a dream," or more specifically, "it was all a game" type ending!

still, 4 stars

That was great.

Decent story until the ending. The same old Intruder turns out to be boyfriend/souse schtick. Do better.