All Comments on 'The Intrusion'

Great short, to the point story...Liked it very much. Well paced, nice detail...well written. Very erotic and arousing...pure fantasy! Thank you!

It's not the same guy she went out on the date with, so what is the connection? Will that be revealed in part 2?

GREAT STORY by the way....top notch

A very good short story, getting right to the point. I enjoyed all of it. I find that physical assault (punching, kicking, ect..) are too often left out of BDSM stories. I hope you continue to write.

Loved that there wasn't't too much lead up and you got right to the point.

This was hot I want to be used alot.

... the title didn't lie

Why? If they aren't regular burglars then what motive would they have to do this?did she reject Derek? Without this background, it feels more like an episode than a proper story.

I enjoyed this. Coukd have taken it further tho.