All Comments on 'The IT Guy'

This is my first full story to be posted on any website. I thank my lovely friend ( wants to be anonymous ) who gave me the inspiration to write this one and editor (PacoFear) for helping me. Thanks a lot and please give your valuable suggestions and feedbacks.

Another that can't use the proper spelling for words. Its not "soooo" but "so" or emotional version "SO" the same goes for other words.

Good premise--pay a little more attention to sentence structure and story development in the beginning. I like how Jack only pleasures Sammy and goes home "empty handed" so to speak. I would ask if that happens in real life, but it's not real life is it? : )

I enjoyed reading it. Jack is very attentive to Sammy Joe, which raises eroticism into the realm of love, which refines and enhances the eroticism. When characters are being attentive to each other, that does it for me every time.

Thanking all my friends and fellow readers for their lovely, thought provoking comments. These comments and feedbacks helps me a lot since i am working on our new story and hope it would be a better effort. Thanks a million once again.

Very well written, the flow of the story was smooth and continuous in its eroticism. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

I liked it. I think its a great first story, and you took your time introducing the characters and making them seem real. It was erotic.

I'm glad you shared this with me! It was very erotic and oh so yummy! The fact that you took the time to develop your characters helps to make them more transcending. They become more than just "cheating" spouses. . .& as a reader I find myself empathetic and understanding of their unrequited desires. When your reader can relate to your characters they become memorable. And when it becomes memorable a story easily moves from good to great. Hope that helps. :D

I loved it. Hottie hot hot hot!

If I ever cheated on my partner, this would be why! Who doesn't crave an intense connection after years of marriage and kids? :-) Likable characters, tightly focused story. A strong first effort, for sure!

Hello folks, I thank you all for reading my premier attempt and the lovely feedbacks. It gives me immense motivation and inspiration to write more. My new story has been send for approval and I will let you all know when the moderators approve it. Thanks a lot once again.

Cutestguy

Good grief! I'm sharing this story w/ a friend of mine...wow, intense!

Not too wordy, just enough action, to the point. I like it. :)

The constant intimacy and eroticism in this story was fabulous. Well written and leaves me wanting more.

sweet and tender

the comment before used the words that sprung to my mind when I finished reading.

Sweet and tender is exactly what this story is.

You paint a nice portrait of the two lovers.

I liked this!