All Comments on 'The Job Was Only Temporary'

I can't wait for the next chapter

It moved a bit quickly, though. Plus your verb jumped from past to present to past again.

The complete lack of sentence structure distracted from an otherwise decent story.

you write well and your grammer is excellent, however, there is very little substance to your story. Keep trying

i wasnt too thrilled with this story, it just didnt seem all that well thought about. and who ends it like that anyway. i was disapointed!!

"...why she tired so hard..." TRIED? If you want to engage the reader, try to get through the first paragraph without an obvious typo.