All Comments on 'The Journal'

Thank you, for taking the time to share your creativity with the rest of us. I am very anxious to read more of this story.

What a wonderful buildup, Mouse...you made me wish I was there with you...perhaps that's another entry in your journal? I'm looking forward to the next instalment!

It was a well written story, however, being from The South you know our men are taught not to call a women they are attracted to "girl" every 5 words. Other then that kudos

a wonderful story by a true talent. makes me wonder what triggers such imagination

Looking forward to the next chapter (if there is one)

All aspiring submitters should be required to read this offering as an example of how to weave a story which not only captures the reader's attention, but also allows him or her to imagine being a participant therein.

The descriptive detail is excruciatingly erotic; the storyline held my attention throughout. I was unable to find any inconsistencies or lapses in this submission--evidence of the author's ability to wed her talent to the interests of the reader.

I look forward to the next installment. Well done, mousethatpurred !

it is the goosebumbs i am getting reading this

Just the right amount of seduction and innocence, definately HOT. Please, let us have another chapter. She, reminds me of someone I know, and cherish dearly!

CM *wink*

I am so glad that a friend and fellow Lit author sent me the link to this story!! It was not only well thought out, but well written and delivered. The development/build-up was incredible and the climax....well....let's just say that it left me satiated, yet at the same time, yearning for more. I beg of you....do not let the story end here.