All Comments on 'The Journey to Bliss Ch. 04'

Very nice story boy. U have all the good techniques for writing a good story. Liked it, but here is a suggestion. The female character is a bit too older. If u write a new story keep her in her early 30's. Morever, it is well known that married women r very reluctant to enter an outside relationship. Keep her husband alive, and then net a story around the wife. Sex is good to read, but seduction is better. Increase the resistance part on the side of female, and make the stranger seduce her. Also the writing in third person (not using I) increases the pleasure of reading.

I hope u would appreciate the suggestions. I will be eagerly waiting for ur next story. Morever if u want to know exactly what kind of story fasinates us, please search and see the story "Taken & Subjugated" by Rupa. I'm very confident u can write one better. U have the art, now I hope u also have an audience subject. Keep on, waiting for more.

when will you have your next thrillers

It was nice to read, thanks