All Comments on 'The Loser Ch. 01'

Nice job. I liked it. Continue in this vein, and flesh it out. I'd read more.

Real good start. Nice take on the control aspect of the story. Liked the approach. Next time some more detail of the acts themselves would be a good thing.

I really like the way you seem to be taking this one. He's horny, he gets his rocks off, but then...

HE DOESN'T ACT LIKE A SCUMBAG! What a concept!

So many of these have a mean, hateful streak in them a mile wide and just as deep. Your protagonist is showing himself to be a nice guy; please keep it up.

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amativissimus

like others i like the way this is playing out not the i am god now i have a sextoy ploy which im sure will come into play but this is a refreshing twist on this story base. "jakk"

as many of the highschool boy discovers mind control as i have read you think i might be tired of them... nope, not yet.

That he doesnt get too mean is especialy nice, i am a big fan of stories with happy endings

I enjoyed this. Cannot wait for the next round. You can pretty much take this one anywhere.

This is a great start. Looking forward to reading more. I agree with eveyone else that it was a nice change that the guy was not a compleat asshole. Well done.

First new comment in 17 years - loved the line "his life didn’t even bother flashing before his eyes."

Hope this writer went on to better things.