by rik581
Wow ! Rik581 You have created a very sophisticated and complex story !
I have been very pleased each time there is a new chapter . Looking forward to
Ch. 14 .
Why are you only giving us small snippets of a story ? Please please please give us more than one page. Suspense is nice but at least give some completion of a act
get this story over with it is getting boring and dexter gets to save his manhood
this is as far as the post on a different site went. when will this author deliver anything other than what was on the other site.
Chapter 14 is getting close. I tried to do more with it than before. The scene with Dexter and Angela is done. Sarah is back at the mall with a client that is about to pay a debt to society. That is done. So there are a couple of more elements to add. Normally I would have already posted those chapters, but I think the story needs a longer read at this point.
I love the story you’ve written. Very deep and intriguing. I do feel dexter is too much of a victim and I am getting weary of his whining. I would like it if he found himself uncomfortably aroused by the dressing up or at least the sexual attention it draws from his GF. He finds being a man so important yet I don’t ever see him really acting like one in the story. Other than that; fantastic job. I know what it takes to put something like this together.
I am now working Ch. 14 again. There are several aspects of the story and a new twist that are taking me longer as I want more details and I have to add a few characters. I have been away for a while but I'm back now.