by okayjack
Loved the story. Wish my wife would loosen up a bit and do some of these things and more importantly, tell me about them so we can share the moment.
I think there's a good story in here but stories written in the present tense are difficult to write well and even harder to read
Sadly you failed the writing test.
Stick to third person past tense.
Not bad, but the uncertainty disappeared when Sweetie answered his opening comment - 'Must be my lucky day!' with 'It sure is!'
Sure, we all knew she was going to get drilled aloft, but the Bull knew it right then. The story could have been even shorter if he had just said 'When the seatbelt light is extinguished, let's go back to the head and see how many states we can fuck over! Then we'll ask the Stew for our Mile High Club pins!'
So very erotic. I joined mile high club last summer and it was a lot like this except when we left rest room there was a guy waiting outside....embarrassing.