All Comments on 'The Pics of My Wife Ch. 02'
by schumi007
- 18 Comments
Anonymousover 16 years agoYour syntax is atrocious and it is evident that english is not your native language. In no way is this story erotic. It was a complete turn-off.
Anonymousover 16 years agobesser auf deutsch, so kannst du die geschichte gut ausarbeiten. es giebt sicher jemand der es dir dann auf englisch übersetzt.
Anonymousover 16 years agoSheer crap - don't bother with any further submission from this idiot - English is not his native language but that is no exscuse for poor plot, bad characters and story. In short, stay away
Anonymousover 16 years agoyou must have shit for brains to write such an idiotic story. Not worth reading.
Anonymousover 16 years agoIf you ignore the fact the plot is so bad as to be totally ignorant, the badly written piece would turn you off anyway. If you insist on writing more get and English editor to review and to revise your work.
Anonymousover 16 years agoSamual X lost to schumi007 - this is now the worst piece of crap here
peggytwittyover 16 years agoThis is written so badly. The grammar is horrible and the writing is so jerky that it is impossible to read with any comfort. This needs more then an editor it needs to be totally rewritten. Sorry keep trying if you need to write.<P>PT
Anonymousover 16 years agoshow some of your own writing? Got to give the guy credit in writing in English, not his primary language and posting. I found it to be erotic and I have read far worse here.
The fantasy isn't a real hot one for me but everything doesn't have to be written to meet MY fantasies.
Seems like most of the stories I look at that have comments...most of the comments are negative. Would assume that those types are trying to reduce the number of stories posted or drive people away so that they can have a "private" little club.
Grow up, quit whining.
hedi6789over 16 years agoYou're still out there to torment unsuspecting readers... Please stop this, the story sucks and your English sucks (though I have to admit this was marginally better than the first chapter...).
Ehrlich, dein Englisch ist furchtbar und selbst wenn der Plot besser wäre, ist es nervig zu lesen...
Anonymousabout 13 years agogrammar of this piece needs improving to enhance readability and enjoyment
