All Comments on 'The Pleasure Parlor Ch. 01'

Please continue these lessons. Your story is great.

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the English is a little rough, as you are clearly not a native English speaker. But it's more than made up for by the eroticism of the story. I look forward to hearing about more of Evelyn's lessons :)

I liked the story except for the present tense. The present tense is very difficult to do and therefore very rarely attempted by even the most polished English writers. I think your effort was remarkable for someone not of the English persuasion and perhaps it is too late to change in future chapters of this story but if you have several planned, I would urge you to try in past tense.

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