by lil_smurfette
I enjoyed it as well, but found the transition between perspectives a bit disruptive. Some method of formatting could help, as long as it doesn't happen more than once a screen, say 4-6 paragraphs.
I admit I'm not really familiar with the options available, or how best to use them. I'm not much of a writer, more of a reader.
You didn't actually say the story would be continued but I assume you realize there are many more chapters and adventures to explore. I eagerly look forward to reading them.