All Comments on 'The Revival of Mother Ch. 02'

just great.

This story is so fucking hot and sensuous unlike a lot of these tales. I've been hard all the way through. Keep it going whatever you do.

Good second part looking forward to the next chapter!

your descriptions and text have made me so hot. please continue the affair. i want mother more than ever.

Loved everything about it. The incest angle is hot even though it is make believe. Love the Tranny part too.

what a fantastic story

"A tale told by an idiot, full of sound and fury, but signifying nothing." "Thong" was used instead of "tongue" every time.

Is there a way to erase these juvenile ramblings?

What does that even mean? How do you kiss crawlingly? why was she wearing thighs? cloths? hard to read

"Yes I do." Nana licked the sperm of my face and lips with her soft thong. She pressed her thong into my moth and kissed me soft and crawlingly with her sperm.

MOTH should be MOUTH. MOTH is a winged insect. Crawlingly is not a word.

You repeatedly used THONG instead of TONGUE. TONGUE is what is in your MOUTH. THONG is a type of small women's panties.

I would love to see a continuation of this story. Love tye progression so fat. What a turn on.

Does mommy have a set of balls that produce sperm? I love the concept of this story but needs editing.

Tongue=Thong

others have mentioned the corrections.

Thanks for a fun story errors and all

Charlene

ps I had to edit this comment 3 times.lol

Need someone to proof read your story before posting it. Lots of spelling mistakes.