by RoperTrace
Thank you for your comments and observations. I have used two different Lit.com editors over the years, and have proof read all my work, multiple times. It sometimes still gets missed. I just read a few of my old works in the past week, and still find grammar, spelling and usage errors. If this were my personal site, I'd correct when that happens, and re-publish. It's more difficult on here, but still doable. Thanks again.
Hope there are more chapters to follow, a well developed start. There are a few grammatical errors along with incorrect word usage, would be a plan to proof read any further submissions(no pun intended) first. I do hope you continue and thank you for this chapter.
Where have you gone?? I miss your stories!! Haven't been here for a long time, but came back to look for more, and none. Please write again, I know I'm not the only one missing your talented stories.
Everything you have written is superb. I felt as though I was right there. I'm a female and I love your writing. You truly have a gift.
It is very evident from your writing in this story, that you have a grasp on the loving side of BDSM, and how it meshes into a lifestyle. The story of how Bobby learned about punishment from his father and mother was a very erotic side story to this one. It was as if the story could be seen visually as I was reading it. Very well, and lovingly done! I loved it immensly!! You've restored my faith that there is someone out there, that understands!
A great, hot story with a fairytale ending. The sex and the BSDM was perfectly written. Thank you for sharing with us. Please keep writing.
Very hot story. Please, please introduce me to Bobby. I want the same treatment. If I wore panties, they sure would be drenched. MMMM MMMM Good job Whosonfirst.
Very well written....the visuals are great...nothing better than feeling like you are there...and I wish I was...
The author has a great sense of the erotic. This story builds in just enough background of just the right flavor to make a plausible read once the willing victim is in harness. From that point, it's just good sex.
Moliere
I look forward to more submissions from you if they are of this standard.
SN