All Comments on 'The Sex Tape'

It takes a good while to verify the suspicion that this is a lesbian encounter. The Hubby involvement IS present (and turns out to be 'not insignificant' - looks like it was HIS idea!) However, that is substantially less than the lesbian aspect of this contribution! Should be in the Lez category!

interesting device to bring the reader in. very effective as the narrative was well done. makes me want to be a lesbian.

Pick up a book and copy the punctuation and apostrophe pattern. Reading your story, these mistakes are a distraction. Also, feels a little bit like a draft version. Maybe sit down and rewrite one more time. Definitely keep on writing. The theme is great.