All Comments on 'The Shop on the Corner'

by kimuk

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
WHY BOTHER?

This is neither interesting nor sexual. What a waste of time.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
great start

Think this has some real promise. Hope there is more

JustaSCOUNDRELJustaSCOUNDRELover 12 years ago
Short but...

An interesting premise. Ignore the naysayers and write more. Please try to make then next one longer.

Mike

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
You've made a great start.

I hope you can see what happens next. It would be very interesting to read it. Please continue.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
good but too short

This is a good start but is only chapter one. The scene is set, but it would have been better to continue the story until she has sex with someone for the first time. It would be a natural break.

Look forward to chapter 2, but hopefully not 3,4,5,6, each being as short as this one.

CeasarBoobageCeasarBoobagealmost 12 years ago
next?

Interesting start... When will chapter two be ready?

Anonymous
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