by kimuk
An interesting premise. Ignore the naysayers and write more. Please try to make then next one longer.
Mike
I hope you can see what happens next. It would be very interesting to read it. Please continue.
This is a good start but is only chapter one. The scene is set, but it would have been better to continue the story until she has sex with someone for the first time. It would be a natural break.
Look forward to chapter 2, but hopefully not 3,4,5,6, each being as short as this one.