All Comments on 'The Taking of Alicia'

Too predictable after the title and the first few paragraphs. Waste of my time

PLAYTIME

The story is fast paced, from the home invasion to taking Alicia on the bed. Thee is somewhat ofa surprise when the unmasked villian is in fact her husband and the taking was just a game. The hint that this was a role playing game was a little too patent, perhaps disappointing the anonymous commentator. The exchange of the safe word should have been a little more subtle.

ALL IN GOOD FUN

The reader can feel Alicia's beating heart from the time the intruder forces his way into her home. Do she lift her butt to allow him to yank her jeans off her body out of animal magnetism or fear? However the author might have more subtly raised the exchange of the safe word.

I might have suggested having the intruder demand: Where's the safe? And the response being the signal to proceed or not to do so.

The taking is appropriately an exercise of unequal power.. She's stripped naked; he merely unzips. But we learn it's all good fun at the "Reveal."