by Sean Renaud
The only problem I have with this story is that the girl was not a virgin. The tale of the unicorn goes that only a maiden can lure it. A maiden is a virgin. Not simply a young unmarried woman, but a virgin. She's innocent to the ways of men and women. I'm hoping you continue this story, though. It is a nice opening to what could be a very interesting tale.
brain crash,
system reboot.
Unicorns have zero interest in any woman not a virgin. your story does not fit with the mythology.
nothing wrong with your ability to use English and develope a story though
some thing people can wine about but its your world fill it with what u want.
A very well written and detailed story, also extremely arousing. I don't recall ever reading a scenario like this, well done.