All Comments on 'The Upgrade'

I am looking forward to more from this new author. An excellent first submission. Well done!

I love how they both took turns controlling the moment. Hot and raunchy and lots of fun.

very horny and well written more needed from this writer

you're a good writer,keep it up.

PLease continue the story - you know there's more to it!

Enjoyed your first submission.

Well written.

Please post more stories.

He loosened her up pretty good. My only complaint is the use of adverbs. I think they should be used carefully and sparingly (and I know those two words are both adverbs), if at all. And especially the word "sensuous" used as an adjective or adverb. Please banish this word from your vocabulary. You don't need it. It makes you look lazy.

but soon went down the john and turned in to a load of bullshit....