All Comments on 'The Vacation Ch. 2'

Who Said Love and Erotica doesn't go together! WOW.. THANKS

You're a good writer, but I would highly suggest an editor (its "might", not "mite", "your" meaning the possessive vs "you're" the contraction of 'you are', etc.) The spelling errors detract from what is otherwise not a bad story.

Nothing ruins a story like poor spelling. Also $500,000 is NOT rich

Did you go to school?

I just wish people understood homonyms. Words that sound the same but have different meanings. I thought the story was pretty good, but please people, have someone check it before you post because spell check doesn’t recognize homonyms.

mite = MIGHT, San Tan lotion = SUN Tan lotion, deference = DIFFERENCE, All minor, but irritating issues, at this point in your writing travels

Good bones but please get a proof reader.

Needs something. I like the story but something is missing. AAA+++