All Comments on 'The White Rose Crisis Ch. 01'

thanks for the cliff hunger ,GRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!

Fantastic! Don't keep us in suspense tooooooo long.

Great story! Cant wait for the conclusion!

OH GOOD LORD , lol You have to finish this story . I hope it's soon too hahaha/ bill

This can't even be grade school writing as its filled with far too many and frequent over use of "..." and "--" to the extent eye strain results. The author needs to go back to grade school and learn the basics again.

Please continue with the story!

Please don't leave it hanging. You got to finish it and soon too.

The guy who left the 'rotten' comment is wrong, this is great. So for Mr Rotten, who is clearly doing it wrong, I will post my handy guide to using Literotica.

1. Find a story.

2. Grab your penis.

3. Read and stroke simultaneously.

4. Repeat 3 until you cum.

5. Suppress the desire to comment on the author's writing.

Got it?

We need more chapters. Thanks

I vote for the bride! Great story, please don't wait to long for the next chapter. I need to know what happens next.

If it was me to continue it a span of time would have to occur. The way you ended it with him not knowing is great. If it was me continuing I would leave a time interval between the wedding night and the rest of the story. It could be weeks or months. I would leave him hanging that night and start with him reviewing photos of the wedding party to try and find the woman or women that did not have a rose in the photos.

I love the idea of continuing months later, but I also think it should be one of the sisters. Mother/aunt fucking doesn't do it for me personally, and he can still end up with Meghan in the long run. Many ways to end this - good luck!

I would like to know if the next chapter will be coming out soon?

I've received a few requests/ideas from people, all pretty similar, and one very interesting concept has been suggested to me that I think I'm going to run with. It's a little bit different and also a bit of a cheat, but I like it and want to see if I can pull it off :P stay tuned, don't want to rush things too quickly!

shame you got hung up on oversensitive personal gripes and couldn't leave any kind of comment on the actual content of the story, mr rotten

keep writing, the ending made me feel like my world was reeling with insanity just like him!

I actually went back to the first page and re read it for clues about the people. I had no idea who the characters were. I even thought of getting a sheet of paper and writing down the names and trying to draw up cast sheet with small bio's.

How old was your protagonist? What does he do? Why could he not get away from the family home? One of the female family members was 20, Taylor just turned 18, other than that the wild child aunt is the only other one we have an age for. Relationships? Interactions? The only other male mentioned was the groom about whom we know nothing.

If we have no idea who the people in your story are how can we understand the mix up or develop any sympathy for his plight?

dude, you gave me enough to work with, and much more than some people do! dw man you cant please everyone apparently but I liked it

great story, it would be interesting if more than one girl lost their rose so the guy has to work more to find the one he had sex with

Love this style of short story, I mean long ones are freaking awesome but sometimes I don't want 7 pages of life story, set up and drama. Also unless there's something specific about a character I don't enjoy, something like this lets me project my own imagination into the scenes ;) I read the next in the series, looking forward to the rest.

P.S. Wet myself laughing at the sad sack of shit above XD too bad he doesn't realize you weren't writing this just to meet his own specific tastes. My advice is to take the constructive criticisms but ignore guys like that :) regards, a fellow part-time author

I can't wait to read part two and three!

Like a Murder Mystery...which room holds the flowerless beauty

I'm hoping there might be a part two... Please ;)

I'm afraid that I accidentaly gave 1 star. It should have been 4 stars. That's what I get for typing on my phone.

Intriguing :)

Sarah, l think it was the bride. What a great story., serious, but also funny. What a mistaka to maka!!!!!!!

5/5

I am enjoying this very much. You have a great way of building your characters. Looking forward to more laughs and hijinks.

(2/10/2023) BRILLIANT!! What else can I say? I know I'm late to the game, but at least I won't need to wait for the next installment. Very nicely done. Five stars.