All Comments on 'The Xmas Party'

Everyones cock is bigger than Bobs.

situation. Every woman gets hit on at every party. Only the sluts get into it. What does that have to do with Paula?

but would have been a great deal better if written by someone with a grasp of the English language. Alternatively, next time get an editor.

Just another cuck story...

Too bad the husband didn't get it on with the other wives... But he's not that kind of man is he....

not a bad tale but why all the switching between "she" and "you" and all the other confusing mechanics?

Learning to write requires learning to use grammar correctly.

A critic. If you are reading for the erotic pleasure of the story, you really do not see ANY errors. You critics need to be gone with yourselves.

/facepalm

Yeah, okay, some grammatical stuff – but the gist of the story was great.

Giving it 5 stars for following through.

Good story, standard theme but well told, keep going.

A fucking slut and a cucky boy. Go Joe!

Get a good editor. This mess is too choppy with point of view and tense changing. Although most of the stories I've read on Literotica that use another person for editing are still a mess. Maybe find someone who doesn't read Literotica, but has at least a high school education to edit for you.

It really surprises me there are so many authors who cannot get an erection unless they are fantasizing their significant other screwing someone else.

AJava SHRIEKED: "If you are reading for the erotic pleasure of the story, you really do not see ANY errors. You critics need to be gone with yourselves."

It is impossible to read a story for erotic pleasure when someone is dragging fingernails on a chalk board. And that is exactly what a story written by someone with a sixth grade education sounds like.