All Comments on 'They'll Never Forget'

Not sure why the power being off is important - and she's watching TV ??? Good build-up, though, so keep writing and pay attention to the details !

If this is your first story then you can go places. You have the talent. Keep up the good work.

Mr.Sam(kinkykingfisher@yahoo.com)

Nice effort for a first try. You show a lot of promise. Try again, and see where it leads. Be sure to use very descriptive terms, thus allowing your readers to experience what the people in the story are experiencing.

Good luck, and best wishes...

MO

I'm a married mom and this story really got my juices going. it was sweet and yet sensual.

I hope you continue and add some more chapters about these two very soon !!! Joan V @ The Jersey Shore

I loved this story, It was very good. Main item for improvement I would have is to be a little more consistent in the story....the power was out but she was watching tv, and at least at my house the doorbell doesn't work without power either. Doorbell especially isn't as big of a deal but those little things can really help a story. Great job though.