All Comments on 'Three Shower and Then...'

This one doesn't even know what verb tense means, much less how to correctly use that information.

This was pretty bad. An editor might have ironed out some kinks, but still...

is help to the author,I don't know what a verb tense is either.However I do know what an asshole is though , as I have just read his comment.Believe it or not, I read stories to enjoy them,not to do grammatical analysis,and I liked this story.

The author probably lived this story in real life and just HAD to tell it. An editor would have gone a long way toward making it more readable. Nevertheless, it has the feel of a "true" story.

I enjoyed this story, it was far from being the worst I've read on the site. They've only started writing so what's the point in destructive criticism ? At least they had the courage to submit a story.

It's mildly worrying that at least one of the correspondents here has reached the age of majority without grasping the fundamentals of the past, present and future tense, but what the heck.<br>

<br>

A perfectly servicable fantasy from one of our newer writers. Sure, it ran a little like homemade porn (I'd like to have seen more of the inner thought processes), but at least we avoided the standard "Call me your slut!" tedium.<br>

<br>

Keep 'em coming, <u>Skinheat</u>.

Two whores and one dick.