by An Awful Cad
Your writing is very smooth...and perhaps a bit too erudite?
Although I ADORE the concept of a "leaky furnace pussy..."
Yes, dumping on Chuck makes you a definite cad.
taking the virginity of a sweet, young coed. But then Janine led you to her room, didn't she? Perhaps Janine wasn't as pure and innocent as I'd first thought. Maybe you did her a favor by deflowering her.
Keep it up!. There are others who. like you, are good writers and have an interesting point of view who need to hear from us who like their work. If you like this author, please say so here.
I liked this story quite a lot. I'd prefer a bit more focus on the loss of virginity. And some of the language seemed a bit overly complex. Just because you have a Thesarus (or an excellent vocabulary) doesn't mean you want to alienate yor readers with too many ten dollar words. I like your more "refined" style, however.
The guy in this story has no redeeming qualities and the story didn't hold my interest at all.