All Comments on 'Time to Grow Up'

"Your" is the possessive of you, such as in this instance "your grammar sucks". Whereas you should have used "you're", such "you're going to get no stars from me for this piece of writing.

Also when you told Jeanette to "lye" on the bed, did you mean potassium hydroxide or sodium hydroxide? Lye is the caustic substance used to make soap or alkaline batteries, but to "lie" on a bed is to be horizontal.

Mistakes such as these make this story most frustrating to read.

shut up and enjoy the story.

it reads fine but seems like the ending could be better