All Comments on 'Time Will Tell'

interesting. i wana see were it goes from here

will the waiting periods control. TK U MLJ LV NV

Your ideas are interesting, but I think you overplayed your hand. Rather than having Marvin directly lecture the protector (and the readers by proxy), it would have been sufficient to simply show the new world, and show him ultimately rejecting it. (In other words, trust your readers--most of them are smart enough not to need to be led to a conclusion.)

I really like the concept. It would make a fun short (or longer) story. You rushed the end, I guess you did not like it so much?

Good story. Like it a lot. AAA+++