by ianbabyyy
An interesting start and a good set up! I appreciate where you chose to start, throwing us right into the middle of it, that way we can get to know the main character at the same time as the others.
Pain isn't really my thing, but Alanna's submission was very hot. Beautifully written!
And it has potential. I'll keep an eye open for the sequels.
A very intriguing start to what seems to be a rather unique story. The writer's ability to transport the reader smack dab into the middle of the action is unsurpassed ! Can't wait to read more !
It was very well written and already has me wet with anticipation. I will be impatiently awaiting additional parts keep up the good work. ^_^
I totally hit the wrong star button, and gave it a 1 instead of a 5. I really loved it, and hope you'll continue. This is VERY well written and almost completely free of errors. But more than that, your voice just leaps off the page! I promise I'll be more careful in my rating with the next chapter, just don't stop posting :(
Part 2 is pending! I'm sorry I didn't mention it would be multiple chapters, but it'll take a bit to build up. I promise more sexy things!