All Comments on 'Tom and Mandy Ch. 04'

It's now all business deals within the "family business" construct, well that as it be. The US opportunity with cover provided versus England and nothing but negatives across the board it seems things are about to become somewhat more twisted. LOL

You switched from Pat talking to Martha without a pause for breath, no word of explanation. Why don't you proof-read this crap story before you post it, then people won't have to keep telling you your writing sucks; case in point:

"I get stuck into my work and my first welding job is childishly easy, it takes me no more than an hour to complete it.

The clanging and banging of steel is like music to my ears, you get so used to the noise; well...you just switch off.

I start to think about Martha back at Tim's place and I hope she is ok.

"Oh, I felt that! It's a kick, a little kick from you my little baby, do you miss daddy too?" I sigh, rubbing my swollen tummy.

I hope Pat is getting along ok at his new job; I worry about him driving back again, by himself."

How the fuck are we supposed to know what you're thinking when you change protagonist mid-paragraph like that? No-one on this site is a mind-reader, if you can't tell a story clearly, don't fucking bother.

You sure threw a new wrinkle in this...LOL...liked it though. Be interesting to see where this all goes.

Love this story. Keep it going. Thanks

Was going really well till you got others involved again fucking the siblings just as they are trying to settle into their lives in a new cou try with a child on the way. Why did you do it I had to quit and write this cause it disgust me at the very first sign with Julie and Martha. Certainly won't be looking to see what else you wrote.

The story starts very well, but its turns to group sex, I disliked, sorry, but is not for me.

If you write more chapters, please, returns to the beginning line of the story.

Fucked up big time

Another good story that doesn't finish. That is the one thing that really bugs me on this site. It was going good and had a lot of potential then it just stops. Argggh

Martha will offer Becky's muffin in heat to cover her cheating. I dont think Patrick will be happy if he finds out she is having sex with two women. This may permanently affect there relationship negatively.

I hope that one day soon you will finish this story. Such a great plot and so sexy too. I really do think it is time Literotica insisted on completed story series before publishing.

i gave you 5 stars, thou you have started to ruin the story completely. It started of with love between siblings and now its become a ugly ass family fuck fest. Also why make Mandy cheat on her so called love of her life, wtf if they truly loved each other they wouldnt have cheated!!!

I am at a lost why authors will get a good story line going and then, nothing, just leave no conclusion or ending for the reader. So disappointing.

I have really enjoyed the series I hope to see where it goes from here

Why? Why do they always screw up a simple incest love story? I'm glad I skipped most of it when it became obvious. To go by most of these incest stories we are all a bunch of perverts.

You fucking ended this the most trashed way possible should’ve kept the siblings by themselves and not bring some fucking pathetic uncle and his shitty incestous family into it🖕