by TheTitLover
The family needs to be next. Mom.Aunt & Granny,let them enjoy Tommy. Let Tommy enjoy them.
he should assume control over her, where she thinks... she thinks she is in control.
I'm enjoying your storyline. Keep the Mom out of it, okay for the Aunt if you need to. He should take control of his neighbor since he's blowing her mind.
Great story. Well done and the bio was a nice
Touch.
I agree with some of the others let Tommy take control of the neighbor while she stills thinks she is in control
Nice story. Just started the series and enjoy the little glimpses of family getting involved. Tommy should not be a submissive to the neighbor. Maybe he can tame her a bit? And don't forget Sarah the receptionist.
I'd seriously give anything for at least the mother to get involved, I've been looking forward to that since the beginning.
love your story and writing style. Keep up excited and we will keep appreciating you and urging you on!
You Describe Mrs Stern as a 52 F cup....I don't know if you know this but the 52 is the measurement of the woman's rib cage and not her actual bust....the cup size is determined by the difference in the rib cage and her bust. So if she had a 28inch waist and a 52inch rib cage that would look kind of weird.
Great story so far, really want to see his mom and aunt get involved. Ive given the other stories in this series all 5 stars, and only gave this one four because I didn't like him being dommed. He's already a little guy, stature wise, and I don't want to see him become a sub. What would be awesome was if Tommy was able to break Mrs Hancock, and dom her. Either way, looking forward to more and hoping for an incest twist! And don't worry about it bothering any readers, 2/3 of the top rated stories here are incest stories
I see three options regarding Miss Stern's size, one I say it was a mistake, two I suggest you go look up some porn star bios or three I simply tell you that a lot of women wear the wrong size bra. Which would make you most happy? I do know how bras are measured though, it's been my dream job for decades. I will try harder in future, but you should always be prepared for oversized sweater melons, I chose my name for a reason.
As for worrying about Tommy and Mrs Hancock, rest easy, it should have already been clear that Tommy felt a bit weird about it all.
It was all well and good but with the new found sexual power he has I would hope that he becomes more dominant and learns to take control. Then turns the tables on this bitch and make her his submissive cumslut.
I am all for the incest aspect with his mom and aunt. However, not really with his grandma. I have been reading this series waiting for the incest but I am ok with waiting because it is an awesome series.
Son of a bitch! You just had to go and ruin the story.
I suppose you are a fucking pussy wimp in real life, who's mentally sick enough to like being dominated and taking orders from women. But did you really have to make Tommy's character do this shit? You didn't even try to make it seem like role play that he was doing for Heather's benefit. Oh no! You just had to turn him into a faggot. But then again, what else can be expected from one such as you.
I really wish you'd have died before you put this garbage up.
Fuck that! Tommy should have fucked her into submission and she would have loved it! That chapter sucked!
So nice for the anons to tell us how we should write. I wonder how many they have written. Nice battle of wills. She tried to dominate him, but was struck a blow and had only partial success. I hope to see a rematch soon.
Not a huge fan of the D/s idea in this story. It just feels like your trying to give each story some archetype of sex, rather than giving a couple of individuals flushed out personalities. Also, Mrs. Hancock just sounds like a bitch. If all she loves is power and domination, I can't imagine wanting to be around her. Try sticking to the sexual topics that you have experience with rather than ones you've read about somewhere.
I'd rather there be a progression with a hand full of characters than a slew of women that are basically the same. For instance, all the women featured are hugely endowed, forceful in getting him into bed, and scream their heads off. That description, with minor variation fits every women he's slept with. Try mixing it up with different personalities and sexual appetites. Maybe introduce a women that just wants passionate, slow sex that's quiet in bed.
Finally, vary the breast size. In my experience, D's are really the largest breast size that occur naturally on fit women. Anything larger than that means that they're either fake or she's overweight. To have F size breasts, would mean that she's a pretty big woman. The whole, fit plus huge breasts makes no sense in a natural setting.
Love the chapter, loved Mrs. Hancock's weakening resolve, and liked the domming, since it wasn't too intense.
I definitely want his mom and aunt to get fucked. Really want! :) I have to put my vote that way. No to the GM, but I dunno how you want to do it. Might be good, especially if she's younger, like Ms. Steen.
it was as unsure of itself as were Tommy and Mrs. Hancock. Mixed signals, mixed results, mixed outcome.
Great story so far, and the editing is much better.
Loved this one for the mix of dominance, loved the scene of mrs. Hencock coming in the morning and telling him to eat her out while she enjoys breakfast and then using him for another ride, would love more of that. Also of him dominating his principal
I know these stories been out for a little while and I am just seeing them. I thought it was an awesome story till this chapter--u have sympathy for the character and see him having good things in his life then make him a slave to the neighbor. U make it like he is 10 and not 19.
And really hot sex, at least until he gave in and became a Sub. Could be a little detailed in how he affects these women. On the whole, great job. This chapter, not so much.
I hope he'll turn the tables on the arrogant bitch soon.
He must fuck Heather's brains out...after all he has been with 3 women. No guy is so dumb to be dominated after knowing well that he posseses a hell of a cock
Mom deserves Tommy's big dick because that's what she expected and cared for. The incest sequel may come.
The fourth chapter in this outstanding drama is the best yet. The story is more fully developed in this chapter than in the previous ones, as good as they are, and the pacing here is excellent. Five stars.
Aunt Pam was 14 years younger than his Mum, closer to him in fact, at 26
If you add 14 onto 26 you get 40 but you say his mother is 36.
One of the most important things when writing in continuity.
Sorry but you can't write.
sarah receptionist age 22 , remembers working for client that died 11 years ago...