All Comments on 'Too Hot'

by lagneau blanc

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Very good!

My only critique would be that plain water is terrible for lubrication for any kind of skin-on-skin penetration. Silicon-based lubes work well in water; very soapy water works very well for lube when shower anal is on the menu.

Otherwise... great story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Although there might be some grammatical issues...

Although there might be some grammatical issues, I was more amused by the earlier comment who's author incorrectly spelled "grammar.'

Enjoyed the story, made me wish for a heat wave!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Good story line,BUT......

Good story line,but you need a proof reader. A few grammer errors but it was a hot story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Loved the story...

I loved the story line very much. You need to watch your editing of certain words like "public" instead of "pubic". Several others were incorreclty chosen but all in all, its a good story line. Anal in the shower is even hotter than normal for me so it made me tingle as I thought about me being Clair.

Julia

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