All Comments on 'Train Experience'
by julesteve
- 10 Comments
FLChicagoover 14 years agoPlease, please learn how to use punctuation. And try having someone edit your work. This story was very hard to read.
Scotsman69over 14 years agoYou have a feel for writing, but have some way to go.
ralphprestonover 14 years agoHi there,
Just read this story. What an amazing read and what a massive turn on. Yu have a great imagination and I cant wait to read the rest.
In fact going to print off now so I can read on the train
Anonymousover 14 years agoExcellent story line, great imagination. But it's very frustrating to have to reread sections because there's no punctuation. A sequel would be nice.
Anonymousabout 2 years agoThis story was the best kept secret on Liteotica for about 12 years.
In my book, this is an excellent erotic story. It is erotic and realistic, two-in-one. I gave you a 5- (4.65 = 93%, ☆☆☆☆☆-.)
NorCalGE9 months agoI liked the story, but the punctuation (or lack thereof) was so bad that I couldn't get past it. A+ for creativity. D for basic grammar.
Anonymous2 months agoIt had potential. Story would have 4* but the missing words, fractured grammar, jamming 7 sentences into one earns 0*. Have an editor help you.
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