All Comments on 'Training'

by emma_sub

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SeductionLoverSeductionLoverabout 14 years ago
Couldn't Stop

Your stacatto writing style fits the action nicely. Tried a couple of times to stop reading, but was unable to leave the action.

Stephan10caStephan10caalmost 12 years ago
Great Work

I enjoyed this story very much. I hope you will continue with it some day.

Scotsman69Scotsman69almost 12 years ago
The writing is a bit uneven

care has to be taken in description, when more than two sexual fugures are being discussed. Other than that, your clipped style really works in this piece.

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