All Comments on 'Training Day'

by atomic_x

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Hmmm..........

I thought the end was pretty funny, but I think you could have gone into more detail with the whole thing. For instance, what happened with the gag? I think you went right in to telling about the hot kiss but forgot to tell your readers how the gag was removed. Tidy this up and it has the makings for a really sexy (and funny) story.

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