All Comments on 'Two Lonely People'

I noticed a few small errors in the editing, but the story is great, I think its more of a Romantic story and you brought it to a good conclusion, but left the door open for further additions (I am hoping)

It kept me interested throughout, though I felt the conclusion was a little rushed. Perhaps I just didn't want it to end.

well done

I was so caught up in reading it, I didn't even notice it was four pages long. A great read and a happy ending for both. Loved it all.

is a good thing. I really liked it. Thanks for a good read.

Very well done. An excellent read... I look forward to reading some of your other work. --Jim

This story (and it's sequel) are the best I've read on Literotica. Great job, keep it up. Maybe you'll write another one with these two? That would be great.

then it all fell apart.

Who is Mal?

"Gabby your pussy is as beautiful as the rest of you. And it tastes and smells so sexily, arotically and intimately wonderful."

"Truly?" she was surprised. She kissed his lips again. It did taste quite nice.

She was reclining on the sofa only wearing her short skirt which was bunched up around her waste.

If her skirt was bunched up around her waste I am willing to bet she didn't taste or smell all that wonderful. and what the heck does arotically mean?

sorry, attention to detail can be tedious, but without it . . . . . . . . .

Excellent story! Loved it. Please keep writing more.

Huh, whut?

Good premise, but the execution was quite lacking.

nicely written - ***** stars

Burninglove