All Comments on 'Two Members of Literotica Meet'

but the writing was technically very poor. My quibbles follow via the "Send Feedback" link. You needed a thorough editing and re-editing. Mary's reactions are not believable; she was obviously out for an extracurricular jaunt and her reservations were transparent. And this might well cause this story to be moved to Loving Wives. However, I would not have wasted the three hours plus I spent trying to edit this piece if I thought it was entirely without merit. You will see, however, I got more than a wee bit testy in my quibbles.