All Comments on 'Two Worlds Collide Ch. 01'

you kind of need to pick a tense and stick with it. you kept jumping from present to past, sometimes within a single sentence. it was so distracting that i couldn't finish the page.

interesting story, i hope that you continue with the story

I really like the idea of your story! I hope you do a chapter 2.

Some small mistakes that made me pause in the reading, but easily fixable. Interesting 'worlds collide' plot.