All Comments on 'Uncle Dave's Midlife Crisis Ch. 02'

Your stories would be much better if you had someone proofread them before uploading them here.

Good story with developing characters.

But spelling mistakes at the wrong time really interrupt. 'shuttering' ? try shuddering

great story!

yeaa....u really need to read what u write... cuz tru say.............its at a gr. 5 level education.

The first 2 chapters of this story have a really good plot to them. However, it is somewhat overshadowed by the numerous grammatical errors. These errors cause the reader to stumble, which leads to a loss of rhythm in the story. It's not my intention to be overly critical. Just offering my two cents. Please continue writing. Thanks.

Looks like Uncle has her sister to satisfy next. And why not if it is offered. He might even get both sisters together and put on a show for him.