All Comments on 'Uncle Dave's Midlife Crisis Ch. 08'

I haven't gone back and checked for sure, but it seems to me that Jamie and Jackie switched names about the time mom got into this?????????

I have all the sections of this story and found it to be a little confusing at times. It might be a better idea if you chose to tell the story from one point of view not all points of views as you start contradicting yourself and mixing the characters up. Other plot or story lines might include having Marlene receive a phone call from her husband on Tuesday telling her that the fed-ex guy is suppose to come Thursday. Marlene forgets this and leaves a note on the door saying just walk in and she is dressed or undressed waiting for him.

Who cares about the nitty gritty of 1st 2nd 3rd person singular. loved the concept Im not sure you were hoping for pullitzer but as a horny story its great.

I have read all 8 chapters and they were great. You did seem to get the names mixed up from time to time, but it was not so bad that I did not know who you were talking about. I would like to see go on with this story with Marlene and Uncle Dave on Thursday that would be a great story. I would also like to see you go on after with another story after Marlene and Dave, and make one were Dave, Marlene, Jamie, and Jackie all get together and have some fun all together. Your story is awsome and there are so many places you can take it from here. I loved all 8 chapters of the story. I think you did an awsome job.

Awsome Can't wait for part 9

mityam,

I greatly enjoyed your stories especially the Midlife Crisis series- I just finished Ch.8.

I hope you continue the series, although it appears to have been a while since you have submitted any to Literotica under this ID (last was 10-04).

The series has many open themes left, it would be great to see them completed.

The few errors mentioned do NOT detract from the overall enjoyment derived from your work. I hope to see more in the future _aW

Get the mom and uncle dave together then bring in the two sisters, after that let the brother catch them and join in on the family fun.

A little to much girl,girl,girl stuff. Spelling and punctuation.

I have only read Uncle Dave and I think it is one of the most erotic stories I have ever read.I have noticed that you seem to have stopped writing ,I beg you to start again.

The whole series was fantastic. I came quite a few times reading it over a period of days. Uncle Dave still has to come and "lay some pipe" Let's have al four of them have a romp.

People do things on cue, that is, when the agreed upon signal or prompt is give. People stand in queues when they stand in line.

well thought out and very erotic

You need to post about the three girls taking dave after marlene has her fun with him

And we need to see if Jill jamie and jackie get together

A very well done series. Great characters. Looking forward to more from the author.

for the series. Should have been "Marlene and Her 2 Daughter's Discoveries". Dave wasn't even in most chapters. If I would have known that I would have passed this series by.