All Comments on 'Uncle Dave's Midlife Crisis'

Great story and what man would refuse such a hot little vixen. Hope the next chapter is not far away.

Bring on the next chapter...

Hope uncle Dave gets together with both girls! Looking forward to more.

Great story, good character development. I could see where this could be the first of many stories, including the older sister, and even their brother. With a little work, could get the parnets involved with the kids and with each other.

Keep it going, and I lookin gforward to many hardons from your stories

Where is the second series?

Totally enjoyed that one.

Looking forward to part 2

good work

Simple, to the point and brilliantly written. All the elements of a perfect erotic short story. Outstanding!

Hope ch ( 2 ) is coming real soon Thought it was a grate storie keep it up... the popeye man

The buildup for this story was excellent, bringing the reader along for the ride at the best possible pace. Too fast and it would have just been another failed attempt at erotica and ended up being lousy porn. Too slow and it would have been a bore to read. Hope you continue with this story and this genre.

I liked the story, keep it going, however "menstruations" in the first line of page three conjures up an image of a girl giving head with a mouth full of blood, perhaps you meant ministrations. Anyway cheers for writing your story.

the former is a woman's period the latter is an action which is being performed upon a body - please get a dictionary

...i'm all contentedness here. My favourite series, uncle and neice, the perfect combination of incest and olderman/younger girl. You now have me searching for my very own uncle Dave. love it

It's too bad you constantly tried to switch from 1st person to 3rd person. If you had stuck to one of the other, it could have been much better. (Dont let the hot rating full you. Plenty of people just look for a story to jack off to and woudnt mind if you wrote in a foreign language except for the dirty words.)

Thanks, though, for illustrating to aspiring writers that it is almost impossible to keep switching from 1st to 3rd person and often virtually duplicating many events without leaving the reader feed up, bored, or confused.

Great story!! I cannot wait for the next chapter!!

A similar thing happened with my sister in law, Evelyn.

She was coerced to babysit with her husband 3 cousins. 2 boys and a girl

She was left with the younger boy, Tommie and some thunder and lightening frightened him. He asked if he could come to bed with Evelyn. She agreed and cuddled him and soon felt his rather impressive erection against her leg.. She started to give him some small kisses to his neck. This quickly changed to some deep kissing and the young lad soon started exploring my S in L. She has always enjoyed attention and she soon guided his fingers to her soaking cunt. Within a few minutes she was naked and Tom had buried his prick deep in her. He fucked her aggressively and quickly came. After she cleaned his dick with her mouth she soon had him hard again and they fucked and sucked for hours.

Imagine her surprise to find during a toilet break that her husband Phillie had his prick deep in the arse of his cousin Elizabeth while she sucked on her brother Dave's huge prick.. But that is another story

A good beginning but I was also expecting to experience Jamie to spear and hoping to see how he ended up getting the same treatment from her.

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